The following sequence arose from events associated with the Campaign Senex, played April 19, 2010.
The sequence relates to a number of events surrounding a mystery the party has only just understood ~ that being, that there doppelgangers slowly taking over a town in Germany, replacing town officials one by one. The clues for this have led them to a name: Robur ... and then to the discovery of Robur's house.
At first they don't even see the house, which is part of the plan. My goal with deconstructing this incident is to discuss revealing a scene, in order to freak the players out a little. Remember that this has to be done without any pictures whatsoever, just as if I were describing this at a gaming table.
Note that out-of-campaign comments being made by the players will be shown in brackets: [*] and not in italics. To focus on the main purpose of this post, I will be editing bits and pieces from the original post-and-comment stream.
DM: ... it is just two miles from the Ingolstadt-Nuremberg road that the party stumbles across a disturbing scene.The first sight is not wholly informative; where the road takes a dip and turns to the left, about twenty yards beyond - below a stout apple tree, and partly concealed by it - the party can see the torn body of a horse. It appears to be quite dead. Just beyond, there is a body hung over a fence stile, on its side and facing away from the party. The body is covered with blood, but there is something familiar about it.Now, it should be understood that all is relative silence. There are a few birds, and a gentle wind, but no indication at all that anything has happened, except for this awful sight.
This is all film-making 101. The party can see the initial unpleasantness at a distance. To press home the point, we emphasize two things: first, that the bodies are in a very unnatural way, even for something that is dead. "Hung over a fence stile" implies that something really energetic happened, even if the players do not consciously make this connection.
Second, we emphasize what the players can feel. Any time that we give a description of anything, we always want to list off the five senses. The first three can be told at a distance: what does a scene look like, what does it sound like, what does it smell like? We can cheat with touch and taste by describing the way a character suddenly feels ~ a shiver, a sense of their palms sweating, that they are conscious of freezing in place, that sort of thing. With taste, we can describe the metal taste in the character's mouth (fear, adrenaline) or a sudden dryness.
But we want to pick and choose! We don't want to load up too much imagery, as that only shows the player we are trying too hard. Here, I went with the sight and the sound of the birds and wind. It doesn't have to include more ... but we could have gone with other options (and we will, when we need to do a different scene some other time).
Note, too, that the "sound" here isn't weird at all. This is what any scene would sound like ... yet mixing it in with the appearance of the horse and body makes this quiet feel disturbing. But, in fact, only because I take the time to state it. When we highlight the weird with the normal, the end result is always sort of creepy.
And, of course the small mystery of the "familiarity" is an extra little hook I've added.
Delfig: I'm loading and half-cocking my crossbow. "Let us send one person out to look at the person. Andrej? Avel, you and I should stay on the carriage and be watchful."Andre: "Hmmm. Watchful. Yes." Andrej will cross himself and draw one of his maces with his off-hand, keeping his primary hand close to the other, stuck into his belt. He'll cautiously approach the body sung over the fence, once Avel and Delfig seem ready."
Mmphf. I just love how players go straight into cop-mode when they see this sort of thing. They're not wrong to do so. There really is the chance that something might be still happening. In fact, in keeping with my agenda to let the reader know what I know as I'm reacting to the players, there is no threat here at all. The whole point, however, is to make it look threatening, so as to entice the players into the scene and get their blood racing. We don't want, at any time, to give them the least sense that they are safe (even though they are) ~ and so, with our words, and our voice, we want to take it every bit as seriously as the players do. We CAN'T laugh or make a face when we see them react.
DM: The quiet is very disturbing, although it isn't complete. Upon moving down the slope of the road, Andrej can see a second horse, standing near the decimated remains of a small brick-and-timber house. The horse is alive, but its flanks are soaked in blood. A leg, detached from a body, hangs in the horse's stirrup.The house has a facing of perhaps twenty-five feet, with a door in the center and two windows. The door has been ripped off its hinges, the bricks on either side of the door have been - to some degree - torn out. One window is broken, and an arm hangs through it, and a stain of blood shows on the wall beneath.The odor, the color of the blood ... Andrej understands at once that whatever happened, it was within the last hour. He moves forward, and looks at the other side of the body hanging over the stile.It is wearing the livery of a soldier of the Palatinate of Upper Bavaria.
Okay, so I've satisfied the first mystery. The body looks familiar because of the livery ~ and because the players were aware there were ...
The continuation of this post, all 5,500 words of it, can be found on the Tao's Master Class blog, along with the other two deconstructive posts I have written, which can be read on the Tao of D&D blog here and here.
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